Foxfoot;; AirClan

[X.Radical™]

Name: Foxfoot
Moons: 30 Moons
Gender: Tom
Clan: AirClan
Rank: Warrior [Troops]
Short-Description:

Small tom with amber eyes that resembles a fox.

Picture:

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Description:

If you only got a glimpse of him, you might have thought Foxfoot WAS a fox. That's because he has bright orange fur around his body and a creamy white underbelly. His ears and legs are jet black as well as his nose and some parts around his big, bushy tail. He has long legs, so he is a fast runner and a long, narrow muzzle giving him a keen sense of smell. Some cats think he's half fox! His eyes are amber and mostly show kindness and understanding, Foxfoot walks gracefully and swiftly and dodges with great speed. But he is NOT super cat, he lacks body strength making him weaker in combat.

Personality:

Foxfoot is a friendly cat, don't doubt that. He tries to befriend as many other cats as he can, with more friends he'd have a better reputation and more cats to talk to! He is very gentle and caring, and he isn't too rough unless he needs to be. He is also very good with kits, unless they are causing trouble in the nursery. He likes to joke around at times, to cheer things up if things were down. And he likes to explore new places, but his Clan comes BEFORE curiosity in his book. Yet again, he is still not Super Cat, he's not always friendly. In fact he can be pure evil at times, maybe not PURE evil but still, he gets pretty mean. And DO NOT underestimate his temper. Overall Foxfoot is a very caring cat 'with a few flaws, like everyone else.'

History:

It all started out when Foxfoot was born (DUH!) his mother almost jumped out of her skin when she saw her fox-like baby. He was one of four healthy kits, he had two brothers and one sister. They loved each other very much. But one day a REAL fox stumbled upon the AirClan camp and wreaked havoc. It killed 3 warriors and ALMOST killed Foxkit's brother, Stripekit. When the fox had just arrived Foxkit was playing in the clearing with Stripekit while the others were playing closer to the nursery. The fox saw Stripekit as easy prey and went for him, he had just picked him up when a ginger warrior came to the rescue. They fought fiercely but the warrior was no match and was killed, the fox took the warrior away leaving Stripekit laying, dirty and unmoving. Foxkit went to check his brother but just as he was close enough to feel his brother's quick breaths, Stripekit pulled away with a frightened squeak.
As the time passed Foxkit got bigger and older and soon he was ready to become an apprentice. He wanted to become the deputy, (he didn't know why he didn't want to be the leader), he decided, so he could gain respect and help those who need him if anything like the fox attack happened again. He was nervous and excited for his naming ceremony, part of him wanted so badly to become an apprentice yet another part of him dreaded that he wouldn't even make it to warriorhood! But the moment came and he was named Foxpaw, apprentice of Leafgaze. His Clan gathered around him to congratulate him, except for Stripekit, who was afraid of him now. Stripekit's naming ceremony was held off by a few moons due to his injuries from the fox attack and he was waiting impatiently for HIS time to come.
Now it even MORE time passed and it was nearing Foxpaw's warrior ceremony. Foxpaw was so nervous that his head could explode! He had also worked hard to gain StripePAW'S friendship back. Stripepaw had finally gotten his warrior name two moons after Foxpaw, he was definitely happier.
Even closer to Foxpaw's warrior naming, he was getting more and more excited by the day. He had even gotten closer to Stripepaw by spending time with him and being EXTRA friendly. Later, it seemed Stripepaw had no idea Foxpaw looked like a fox.
Now the day had come, it was a time of pride for Foxpaw as he would receive his warrior name! Stripepaw was also very excited for his kin and smiled almost the whole day. He was named Foxfoot, for his speed, he thought it was a very nice name and seemed to fit him instantly. Foxfoot protected his clan with pride and kindness. But then, just a moon after he was named a true warrior, another fox came into camp. It managed to kill a kit, but it also took the life of Leafgaze. He had tried to stop the fox but it only shoved him aside roughly but not deadly. It must have thought he was also a fox, though if the fox smelled him it would know cat from fox.
Foxfoot was highly saddened by Leafgaze's AND the kit's deaths. Featherkit had always shown great skill and would have made a warrior. But also, Leafgaze, Foxfoot grew VERY close to Leafgaze and just like that she was GONE! After that Foxfoot decided to be an even better warrior, for Leafgaze, and soon got his first apprentice. Yellowpaw trained just as hard as Foxfoot did as an apprentice, it made him so proud. When Yellowpaw got his warrior name, Yellowgill, he was bursting with pride.
Foxfoot is now a great warrior and friend who is a proud and loyal member of LightClan.

Role Playing Example:

Foxfoot jumped onto a nearby rock, feeling it sink into the thick layer of now-dead grass beneath it. He could now see the setting around him clearly, which brought a smile to his face. How great it was to be an AirClan cat, set to roam free through the grass covered fields. There he sat for a few moments, taking a deep breath as he watched the wind carve waves into the tall grass in the distance. The moment broke when the chattering of a hungry mouse started under the large rock. Careful not to move the rock and startling the rodent, Foxfoot peared over the edge of his 'stool'. Another addition to the fresh-kill pile! He commented in his head, licking his jet black lips. With slow, cautious steps he creeped down the opposite side of the rock and behind the mouse. And with one quick movement he had the mouse in his jaws, it gave a pittiful squeak as he bit into it that soon faded to nothing as it's life dissapeared. With a "Heh." of self-approval the foxlike cat buried his catch neatly and then resumed his spot on top of the large, smooth rock ever thankful to be a AirClan cat.

Other:

This is my first medicine cat bio, which was turned into a deputy for another site and now I would like to use Foxfoot as a warrior.

[Sunrise.]

Alright, looks good.
I have on suggestion, for later on in making bios: I noticed that throughout the bio you used many exclamation marks and CAPATALIZED letters. This gives it a rather... excited and bright feeling, and often somewhat... well, not childish, but almost basic RPing, which I know you're at a higher level then that ;-)
Just try and keep it to a minimum. The only time I ever use exclamation marks is when maybe I have a younger cat who is saying something in a high-pitched excited voice, or if I have a cat that is yelling. I never capatalize a word... I just doesn't fit.
Just a way to improve your bios, hope you don't mind me saying ^^
Accepted